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Monday, January 18, 2010

Love Birds...

Dreary was that lighthouse which stood firm amidst the lashing waves,
In an everlasting longing for love..
Tenebrific clouds and ruthless waters,
Seemed to be deceasing this fort, posted miles away from life..

It was that time of the year when this fort sprung back to life,
Migrating birds from places out of sight, chose this abandoned place to stall..
Antithetic were the flocks which settled in,
But for the two, who discovered new breath and life..

Bizarre it was for the two tiny birds to stay in a trance,
Amidst all the fluttering, they shared a glance..
Here was the skyline where the world seemed at peace,
Where the dark skies dropped in to meet the seas,
Incomplete it seemed, yet so complete it was,
When the young birds coquetted and the hustle came to a pause..

As the moon rose up to light the sky,
The love-birds together flew so high..
The flight was enchanting, the wings felt new,
The hearts seemed knit together,
And the lighthouse shied as the romance grew..

Two unknowns had now come together,
The love here seemed to last forever..
The lighthouse was beaming like never before,
Gusts of wind were smelling of new vigour..

But forced were the lovers to fly with their flocks,
Leaving their hearts back on the rocks,
Nature played devil in the form of a tornado,
The hearts were ripped, the joys curtailed,
Never they thought that such would prevail..

The waves grew up to match the heights,
Unlike before, an unpleasant sight..
The roars frightened and the lighthouse stirred,
The birds reared up to desert the fort..

The waters were turbulent,
The once love-filled skies bore a dagger with itself,
The hearts bled but love's a fighter..
Much like a revolt it rose up again,
Forced were the lovers to unite again..

It wasn't just the love of the two,
The cries of the athirst fort reverberated the rocks,
More than it was once shaken by the Nature Gods..
The love-birds reached, fighting the opposing winds,
Their wings scathed but love so surreal..
Re-united they were, breathing they were,
Love and blood poured together..
The last breath seemed the first together,
Together they couldn't live, together they died,
A newer life away from this life,
Two young hearts stayed knit together...

P.S: Sincere thanks to all my readers who have been honest to me with their feedbacks. I hope this post lives upto your expectations. Comments welcome, Cheers!

24 comments:

  1. i loved it..i could see it..i could feel it..!!!wot more wld a poet want than touching the souls of the readers???
    cheers !!

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  2. This very poem epitomizes romance and the very essence of it.One can immediately feel the agony and the ecstasy of the love birds.So far this is the finest work in terms of its impact.One can effortlessly visualize it.It compels one to think n the description seems apt....Keep up the good work.

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  3. i feel honoured 4 having read this stupendous piece of tale datz straight 4m heart....undoubtedly the best u hav penned down so far,Shirshendu...u manage 2 amplify ur emotions each time...the upsurge of emotions is at its maxima in: "Together they couldn't live, together they died"...WAAH!!beauty in itself....:-)go on...v need more

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  4. this is the best one here. I read it fully :D my fav line: "Incomplete it seemed, yet so complete it was", empty were the hearts and love there was.

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  5. nice usage of words.covered most aspects of love. true to its sense..kudos for the effort u are putting

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  6. this is surreal.......u intertwine emotions and reality in a web of impeccable love.......way to go...the best one so far.....keats would have been proud of that......

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  7. The poem was mesmerizing to say the least. I didn't care how long the poem ran, as I was enjoying very bit of it. Each word brought with itself few images, knitted together they put up a really nice picture of what you imagined !

    Really nice poem, underlining the very essence and innocence of love. Kudos !

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  8. Wow..this was honest n straight from the heart. One can readily visualise the joy n then the pain of separation, one can effortlessly feel the romance that is described in the lines. A very lively piece from you. Keep up the good work!

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  9. A famous Ornithologist(a guy who studies birds) in the making..man..way to go!!
    On a serious note,it was awesome!
    As someone mentioned above,one can find every emotion involved in love between the lines!
    Cheerz buds!
    -Shakti.

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  10. was swimming and now drowned..and here is another man who has been purged by love.Every word is transparent in nature and blossoms love without even knowing if it is meant to do so.If such delicate thinking, cherished with emotions, is not the holy grail of love then let aphrodite return.

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  11. fantabulous dude!!!! its out of the world.... i think i have to add something in the testimonial.... a kewl poet!!!

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  12. That's one of the best pieces I have come across in a while..beautifully penned!

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  13. cool man....Easily my pick of the three...!!

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  14. one of the finest work i have evr read in my life .... gr8 work. .shirsh.. keep it up...

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  15. It goes wdout saying..an absolute,eternal poem surpassing all others dat u had penned down...i specially loved d 5th stnaza..it simply stole my heart away..d only thing i can do for u is lend my support n encourage u to keep writing such pieces...
    Well done..!!!

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  16. U really get da feel of some writing once u see da words transformin in2 vivid pictures n stealin u away 2 sum other world.N Shirsh this 1 exactly did da same....perfectly chosen words dat well describes da trials n tribulations of luv........mesmerisin dude.well done....all da bst.

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  17. Shirsh, this is the best of the 3 that u have written so far. Nice use of words, terrific vocabulary - I had to open the dictionary to check the meanings of some words in fact. The visualization and the effect u brought out was superb. Did not know u had so much hidden talent which was waiting to burst out. U are a legend!

    Love
    Torchi

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  18. Mr. Shirshendu Wordsworth Roy, how bout teaching me some poetry?! I would love to write like this man...beautiful piece again.

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  19. hey d poetic piece is jst awesom....u r a gr8 poet man...keep writin

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  20. ofcrse d best out of d 3.....really niceeeee..d poet inside u is improvisin wid evry new poem....carry on...

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  21. The impact that this leaves in one's mind is just so refreshing. Seriously poetry is an art, I don't know if this comes naturally to u or u've developed it. Fantastic stuff...keep it going mate...Cheers!

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  22. amazing work..mesmerising style of writing..keep it up!

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  23. The literary improvement is beyond my projection.. brilliant work. the hard work shows

    A massive leap in the skill at imagery.. so u have taken this very seriously after all :-)

    Personally, romance never struck a chord with me.. but this is no sugary sweet teen love drug.. the portrayal of emotions is very articulate, choice of words pretty commendable..

    Points for improvement: I know this is probably being taken care of in the poem/prose u r working on right now.. u need to make the dark even darker, more morbid (of course i would like it much more then :-P) the dark descriptions should become more visual and stabbing, almost like a cruel jolt to the reader giggling at the romance

    Conc: Great work, keep it tp!

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